Let the Rain Come Down!

10/6/2015

Good writing is supposed to evoke sensation in the reader - not the fact that it is raining, but the feeling of being rained upon. ~E.L. Doctorow

Instructions: Write a piece that takes place in the rain, with the rain being the central focus.

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Respond in no more than 10 sentences and no less than five. You must also reply to a classmate's post. You cannot post identical comments on different classmates' posts. Posting shallow comments such as "I agree" or "I disagree" will not earn you a passing grade. Make sure your posts address the reply that you are responding to.

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Provide specific support for your argument
Use rhetorical devices and other grammar elements
Write EPIC Content-Engaging, Powerful, Informative, Creative

CAUTION!! Do NOT embarrass me, yourself, your class, the English department, the school or your parents with tasteless, meaningless comments. This is for a grade.

Due: October 8, 2015 11:59 p.m. CST

Jessica Reaux-3rd

10/7/2015 03:40:07 pm

Rain roared down a rage of torrents as it collided against the pavement and caused a flood of emotions to erupt from within me. It's frosty droplets cut deep on my thoughts and counseled my tears as a mother would her child--I embraced it. Thane, who stood no more than two feet from where I was, a demon in disguise, and hidden behind the fallen pieces of his midnight hair, watched me. He was talking, but I could barely hear his voice over the downfall, so he staggered closer. The rain wasn't the only thing that chilled me that night, his cold face and stormy eyes screamed distaste. "What are you doing here?" He asked hollowly. It took mere seconds for me to respond; scared but determined to show him I could change, "I wanted to apologize."

Tanesha Hawkins

10/8/2015 02:21:04 pm

I like your story, your a great writer! When I was reading I wanted to read more, to read what will happen next.

Déyzya Hardeman P. 4.

10/8/2015 06:51:11 pm

Jessica, I admire your work! It left me wanting more, which lets you know that it was well written. I loved how you used words like, "frosty droplets" and "midnight hair" it set the mood perfectly for the story.

JeDarion Lyons 4th Period

10/8/2015 07:39:11 pm

I really liked Jessica's story because you can actually visualize the scene that she is describing and it really showed animation and exaggeration.

Breanna Perry 2nd

10/7/2015 04:37:26 pm

I stood motionlessly in the middle of the road not knowing which way to go. I could barely see what was in front of me and on the side of me because the rain had caused an awful fog too occur. I walked lightly so I wouldn't make the rain mad for stepping on its beautiful drops. Rain drops poured rapidly down my body and soaked my clothes.I felt as if my clothes where trying to hug me to death.I couldnt take it any more. It was just too much rain for a whole day so I begged it to stop and it got heavier as I ran under neath a giant willow tree. I sat under the tree crying helplessly when will it stop. But the rain continued and eventually ran off.

Jala Heard

10/7/2015 07:10:26 pm

I like her because it flowed and was logical

JeDarion Lyons 4th Period

10/8/2015 07:42:25 pm

Out of all the days that I expected it to rain it decides to pick the worst day possible.

Jala Heard 3rd

10/7/2015 07:09:32 pm

All I could hear was rain drops falling from the rooftop. Sitting in the house all day such made the mood even gloomy. Hearing the leaky ceiling drip with rain just put a damper on my parade. It was raining so hard it began to flood. The rain did not try let up either.

Keyvion smith 4 th

10/8/2015 09:34:36 am

It was pouring the rain was thick and I barley see anything ahead of me as I walked home my thick jacket project me from the roaring rain fall that falling side ways as if a tornado would come throw as I walk my pants were half way soaked about time I crossed the street just a few more minutes and I will be inside the house and out the falling river from the sky.

Chadric Brooks 5th period

10/7/2015 08:59:01 pm

With the rain coming down like the force of a hammer on a nail, the boy sat anxiously waiting for the bus. Although, not being able to see down the long fogy and cold road because of the down pour of the rain. He sits alone waiting for the bus, with no jacket or any sight of anything around him, he waits patiently until the bus arrives.

JeDarion Lyons 4th Period

10/8/2015 07:59:07 pm

Out of all the days I expected it to rain it decides to pick the worst day possible.With my car abandoned on the side of the road like an orphan at a foster home and my phone dead because I forgot to charge it last night,I wondered why today out of all days?Having to be at work in less than 15 minutes it felt as if that any luck I had in the past had run out.With my clothes soaked with gods holy water I became more and more depressed because I was the only one on the most deserted road in the city.With no cars in sight,I literally gave up all hope even having a job left whenever I do make it to work.Just as I lost all faith a tow truck turned a sharp corner,lights brighter that the morning sun stopped and gave me assistance.

Travis Gray 3rd period

10/7/2015 09:07:07 pm

Poured down raining as i look out the window rain hitting hard on the window. Thinking about everything that has happen to me,while the rain is coming down, the rain symbols my pain, the hard hits to the window symbols my struggle. The rain is all i can hear, I cant hear or feel nonthing else but the rain.

Jacolby Pemberton 4th

10/8/2015 07:13:17 am

Sitting in my friend's house staring at the window watching the rain come down like cats and dogs . Making the feeling gloomy , and sleepy not having anything else to do . After a while I realized we need rain and it can represent many things . Rain can be the release of pain as it falls out the sky to show relief of something you might of been holding on to . Either way rain is a nice site to see with plenty puddles created from droplets.

skylahglenn link

10/8/2015 10:06:18 pm

I agree because the rain can also bring smiles and not just sadness

Rodney Wheeler 3rd

10/7/2015 10:40:41 pm

Looks can definitely be deceiving. As I walked into the bright beautiful city I saw a certain turn for the worst. The more I walked the more I started to feel water raining over me like a curse that won't be lifted. The more steps I took the worst it got causing my clothes to become drenched in water. Suddenly I just thought back to the phrase from when I was a kid "rain rain go away come again another day".

Darius Anderson 3rd period

10/7/2015 11:34:28 pm

It was the end of school and I had told my mom I would walk home instead of having her come and get me. As I started to walk rain started pouring down like never before, I tried to find something to cover me since I didn't bring a jacket but all I had was my school shirt. While I kept walking the rain started coming down even harder, and cars would splash me as they passed by. When I made it home I was soaked from head to toe. I had forgot I didn't have my key and my moms phone had died. I sat down in the cold rain and patiently waited for her to come.

Jordan Castillo 4 period

10/8/2015 01:00:36 pm

Rain falls in crazy chaotic drops, the gusting wind carrying them in wild vortices one moment and in diagonal sheets the next. It runs down my face as a thin layer, not as cold as it will be when November comes, but without the warmth of summer showers. Rain falls like it means to wash us away, like it means to keep hammering until we smudge like a Monet masterpiece. It sounds like the heavens are knocking on our door, roof and window panes. Today is a day of inescapable wetness, even as I sit to watch the downpour errant drops fall in the fireplace.

Jessica Reaux-3rd

10/8/2015 01:04:23 pm

Your writing is amazing! I love your hyperboles and how much every sentence drew me into your story.

micah kelly 4thp

10/8/2015 05:40:55 pm

I really like your story it has great imagery and you kept my attention the entire time I honestly wanted it to be more added so I could find out what happened next.

Tyrell Alexander 3rd

10/8/2015 10:07:57 pm

Laying in my bed, I hear rain drops like never before. Thinking about my future and what It has in stored. As I get up and walk outside, I hear the wind talking to me saying positive things. Will I be successful is what always runs through my head. Motivation and determination will always come to mind when it rains outside.

Tanesha Hawkins 3rd period

10/8/2015 02:15:17 pm

It was beautiful night the stars were out and the moon was shining through my window. When all of a sudden heavy rain started to pour down on the rooftop just like my emotion I've been holding on to. The rain would hit the roof so hard I thought my roof was going to fall. The wind wasn't making it easier for me, the trees were scratching against the window making it harder for me to sleep.

Gabriela M 2nd

10/8/2015 07:08:53 pm

I love the way he compared his feelings to the rain . The rain may have symbolized in a negative aspect

Damian Hinton Jr. - 3rd

10/8/2015 02:23:43 pm

Vigorous rain pour tramples at the paneling rooftops, leaving a reverberating sound that traveling the haunted hallway like bullets. Although I was in the shelter of my home, the water found it's way to run a chill down my spine as if it were trekking its purpose. I cover my head as a thunder shakes the house into terrors.

Plip-Ploop! The screech sounds like a burglar beating for entrance at the front door. Instead of listening to the rest of mother nature roaring, I succumb into plopping in earphones and hiding under the blankets. I didn't want to hear anything else.

Jazmin Rodriguez-3rd Period

10/8/2015 03:40:19 pm

The thunder roared. I decided to stop isolating myself from the world and shook towards the door. I hadn't realized the opening of the door was mother nature's pathway into my home. I was pierced with violent bullets of rainwater. Each drop was quick and fierce-- like a swift cheetah, an Acinonyx jubatus, catching and killing its' prey. As one drop of rain hit me millions of tiny water droplets followed. The ghastly winds followed and knocked me over onto my back-- followed by the raging downpour.

micah kelly 4thp

10/8/2015 05:36:13 pm

The sky rumbled as mother earths tears began to flood the streets.
The trees swayed from side to side as the wind picked up at an alarming pace. Sirens started screeching louder and louder as the storm became more vicious .My heart began to beat a thousand miles per hour as I began to brace myself for the worst. Building up enough courage I swung the door open ,Immediately the rain water pierced my skin maliciously.

ALEXIS FOWLER 2NDPERIOD

10/8/2015 09:20:52 pm

I love Macah's simile, as she compared the sky to Earth. And filled her writing with such suspense.

Stacey Edwards 3rd pd

10/8/2015 06:27:51 pm

I want to go outside and play, even in the rain," Robbie laughed. He ran to his bedroom and put on his red rubber boots. They fit snuggly over his tennis shoes and would keep the water out when he splashed in the puddles. He slipped his raincoat on. It was red too, just like his rain hat. I’m ready, Mum, he said. Wait one more minute, she answered. She opened up the closet and picked up a bright yellow umbrella. Here you go. You’re all set now. Go outside and play. She hugged him and opened the front door. The rain was pouring down. Puddles were all over the grass, street and sidewalks. Robbie opened the umbrella and stood in the rain. It fell all around him, bouncing off the umbrella, his rain hat and raincoat. He started laugh and run around, splashing in the deep puddles.

Déyzya Hardeman P. 4.

10/8/2015 06:44:46 pm

One minute I felt a droplet land on the tip of my nose, and a few minutes later I was soaked. I should mention that the forecast lied this morning, so of course I decided to wear my hair straight--only to end up in a soaked, frizzy mess. As I was trying to put my purse over my head, I ran frantically across the two-way street to approach the covered bus stop. Once I finally sat down, I saw a woman approaching me in my peripheral, she was beautiful, and she didn't despise the rain as I did. She calmly walked through, not letting it phase her at all. Noticing this interested me, I secretly hoped there was enough room on the bus to sit next to her on the bus as I saw it approaching. As the bus stopped in front of us, I gave her a kind smile to let her know she could proceed before me, as she did I tried to fix my hair subtly. Once I swiped my ticket I saw that the bus was full and neither of us had a choice of where to sit; I saw her calmly grab the overhead bar, so I did the same fairly close to her. Once she saw me position myself next to her, I noticed she slightly moved a little closer to me, then we suddenly made eye contact. Her eyes reminded me of the sky just before it began to pour down earlier--astonishing. Whilst looking into her eyes, I noticed myself begin to ask her for her name, she then said "Rain."

Vanité Lewis 3rd period

10/8/2015 09:13:27 pm

Your story is great. It's very descriptive and leaves the reader wanting more.

Teresa Cantu / 4th Period

10/8/2015 10:22:42 pm

Your story is maleficent. It leaves me wanting more. The way you described everything made me visualize this story as a great movie.

Gabriela M 2pd

10/8/2015 07:25:21 pm

The raindrops were music to my ears . The sky full of beautiful shades of grey and purple . The earthy smell of the ground was just like going to a five star spa . The sun shine can never compare to a beautiful rainy day . To many rain may be a symbol of sadness yet they don't see what I see .

Joshua Butler 3rdp

10/8/2015 08:55:42 pm

I like how the way you use the comparison with rain and music.

Shawn Reed (2nd)

10/15/2015 10:12:18 pm

…This is a story that I can tell, if I will, for I was there the entire time. I was walking in the rain. The rain itself seemed displeased about it. The rain itself seemed bitter, annoyed, sullen; annoyed by its own raininess, I mean.

Bryce Harris-Williams 3rd Period

10/8/2015 08:00:30 pm

"What Is Rain"? A dreadful or appalling of discomfort liquid that causes mood swings and gloomy emotions.A weather of where there will be no type of enjoyment throughout any given time period.

Zamyria Hambric 4th

10/8/2015 08:14:07 pm

As i layed in my bed sitting motionless , looking at four walls , different thoughts went threw my mind . The sound of the rain drops pouring down gave my room a sorrow feeling . Thinking of every possible thing there is to do on a rainy day . Theres really absolutely nothing possible. The lighing and thundering just killt the vibe . Rainy days just aren't for me .

Bryce Harris-Williams 3rd Period

10/8/2015 09:52:13 pm

What I like about this is that you compared the rain as lamentation.

Ravonte Woodson (4th period(

10/8/2015 10:21:50 pm

This story was very descriptive and I imagined myself in the same position.

Eric Coleman

10/8/2015 10:51:46 pm

I agree with zamryia because it makes you have deep thoughts to think and relax

Jerrol Jackson - 3rd Period

10/8/2015 08:27:35 pm

As the heavy rain poured down on me and frank we was stirring the boat . But as the wind got faster , faster we was unsure if we was gone make it home . But we had to think positive and pull through . We closed our eyes for 5 minutes what honestly felt like 10 hours the rained stopped . I could hear my mother cries down our boat walk away . What seem to be a knightmare turned out to be good .

Vanité Lewis 3rd period

10/8/2015 09:02:56 pm

There is something about the rain that corrupts the senses. The light tickling wispers enslaves your ears, making the sound of anything else blasphemous. The distinctively sweet aromas are sent directly from Mother Earth herself. The beauty of it is alluring, an extravaganza that your eyes must see to believe. The piquant taste is one to reminisce upon, sensations grasps your taste buds sending them in to a state of shock. A natural wonder of the world. Of all these senses nothing can equivalate to its ambience. It saturates your being and awakens the soul, producing a whole new perception on the meaning of life. But, when the rain ceases, so does everything else.

William Lacy 2nd

10/8/2015 09:06:42 pm

The drip drop of rain in the background as I ran for my life. Help! Help! I scream, but nobody seems to notice my distress call. Rain blinding from every angle I made a quick right unknowingly upon traffic. Like a horse learning how to walk I slip,slide and fall right in the middle of the road. With the allusion of death approaching it took every bit of strength I had to crawl to the grassland. Tapping my shoulder I look back sightless due to the water fall of rain. Suddenly a flash bright like a evening sun took over my vision. Permintly making me a blast from the past, day by day.

Joshua Butler 3rd Period

10/8/2015 09:13:11 pm

The clouds are steady turning black and gray ,suddenly rain started falling hard, i didn't know what to do but, stand in the rain and think about life. Rain still coming down not even temping to stop it was like a lilttle black cloud over my head following me where everywhere i go. Putting my head down as i look like a sad puppy. Rain rain go away as i keep telling myself but, it still rain over my head.

Jaquan Adams 2nd

10/9/2015 11:36:32 pm

I like the theme of the setting. The rain makes the person feels sad and how his life is sorrowful.

alexis fowler 2nd period

10/8/2015 09:15:08 pm

As I reached for his wet hands, he grabbed me into the rain of love. Every drop that pierced his face was a reflection of his heart. The rain got stronger and are emotions got deeper. Then he pushed me and I chased him playfully down the hill till we fell on the wet evergreen grass. Absorbing every drop, watching the rain drops fall to embrace our skin. But it was the rain that started our love. It was the rain that made us love.

Titiana howard

10/8/2015 11:24:00 pm

I thought this was a beautiful incorporation of rain !

jorge patino 3 period

10/8/2015 10:01:05 pm

It seems like a silent jungle where is raining a lot and there is no sings of any type of animals its all deserted.

skylahglenn link

10/8/2015 10:04:54 pm

Sitting at the the lancaster high school champion ship football game with 2 minutes left on the clock and with a score of 21 to 16 lancaster high is down. Just when the crowd gets hype wondering who going to get the next winning score rain drops starts to fall. Most people get sad when it rain but no not this time. The rain brought joy to the player's and fans. Knowing that if we make a touchdown in this last 2 mins we could win. This rain didn't just bring joy it seems that it brought motivation to the players with 40 second left lancaster high made the winning score. The crowd go's wild then though everyone is soaking wet it didn't matter, it was finally a time when the rain was okay and not so sad .

arbriuna howard 3rd

10/8/2015 10:13:01 pm

others may hate the rain while I embrace it. Growing up in a small town nicknamed "the devils valley" (Fort Thomas Arizona population 374 nicknamed because of driest part of az) you learned to enjoy the simple things in life. As a small child I hated the drought it was always dry and lifeless. so when ever it did rain it felt like the heavens finally heard our prays. the rain felt so great on my skin it was like being reborn. now that I am older and in California when it rain I pray it pours grab my children we go dancing in the rain.

Teresa Cantu \ 1st Period

10/8/2015 10:13:58 pm

All that could be heard is the heavy rain pouring hard on the roof and a heartbeat pounding a thousand miles per minute. I sat there worried for the bad news, I was about to receive. I just couldn't wait any longer! The angrier I got the louder the thunder would strike. As the thunder seemed to get louder the faster my heart would pound of fear. I feared what the doctors would tell me. Will I survive through this rainstorm?

Teresa Cantu

10/8/2015 10:15:12 pm

4th Period ^ Not 1st

Ravonte Woodson (4th period)

10/8/2015 10:20:53 pm

It began to rain cats and dogs as I watched from the back porch. The clouds formed as a family and created a gloomy and sluggish feeling. As I began to dose off, the rain would fall hard and I would become paranoid because it sounded like an AR-15 going off non stop. With the rain becoming a steady beat of sadness, I no longer had the urgency to accomplish anything that day.

Alexandria Hodges 3rd period

10/8/2015 10:53:15 pm

You can always tell when a rainy day is coming because you get a sluggish feeling,and most of the time things can't get completed because the rain delayed it.

Eric Coleman

10/8/2015 10:48:29 pm

Rain dops out the sky dropping to the ground like hard rocks.. All I can think is relaxation.

Aleczale Robertson 3rd period

10/8/2015 10:49:58 pm

One day My bicycle wheels turn over the wet track, my speed bringing the cold rain into my face harder than it would were I walking. My jacket gave up on keeping my body dry a while ago and now my trunk is as wet as my legs. On a rainy day like this there's just no point in heavy clothes, the only thing that'll keep me warm is my own movement, the pumping of my legs against the pedals. Head down, press on, thinking of the warmth at the other end. There's a part of me that's jealous of the car drivers, safe behind shatter-proof glass and painted steel, but better days will come .

Alexandria Hodges 3rd period

10/8/2015 10:50:14 pm

The rain drops from the dark cloudy sky while the wind whistles in my ear as I write novels an read books. The feeling of a rainy day puts my mind at ease. And helps me relax even more. Rain for me gives me a feeling of life that there is something to look forward to after. Because there is always a rainbow at the end of a rainy day. That's how I feel about the thought an ideas that come to me on a rainy day.

Amier Taylor 3rd

10/8/2015 11:56:14 pm

I agree with you Alex , rain can be quite soothing an a easier way to ease your mind . An yes for some reason after every rain storm something good appears in the air. Many people don't like rain because they say it messes up their cable or their wifi , but they should actually sit back an listen to the rain . You made a good point alex x

alexander rollins (3rd period)

10/8/2015 10:52:38 pm

The annoying whispers from the rain are making have horrible flashbacks. The rain was the only wittness. I had thought if I got rid of the bodies in the rain it would wash my sins and memories of that tragic night away. The loud thunder reminds me of his heartbeats before I threw the guy in the lake. Who are these little rain drops to judge me I had thought to myself. I went outside for a walk in this touture as I looked down to my shoe I seen a puddle. I looked in the puddle but didn't see anything , well at least that is what I thought. I looked again, and the he was screaming you did this to me. I laughed and replied tough luck buddy. The rain eventually drove me crazy and I found myself jumping into that same lake knowing I would drown.

Titiana Howard 3rd Period

10/8/2015 11:21:48 pm

She was on her way home contemplating upon the question she had been asked Earlier, "Why do you wear so much make up?" Samantha had immediately gotten offended. Probably because she couldn't even answer it herself. She didn't know why she wore so much make up. She didn't know why she did a lot of things anymore. As she struggled to identify the person she was becoming, her eyes began to swell up like the clouds above her and her tears became raindrops rolling down her cheeks just as the rain started to fall on to the gray concrete sidewalk. Samantha felt her make up running off of her face and her mutilated hair spring up into spirals. Her decoyed self was washing away. Samantha started to remember what it was like just being herself and it was grand! The rain brought ashore her new beginning.

Amier Taylor 3rd

10/8/2015 11:52:29 pm

Everytime it rains , it rains in a different way. you have your light rain , your heavy rain , thunderstorms , an they all can be chaotic . One day I was in the car just cruising letting the wind blow in my hair , then BOOM! we started to feel little wet pellets on our foreheads , it was the rain , sadly. We stopped crushing an immediately went home. As we were on the way home , the rain started to pour down ever harder , it started getting a little hectic. The trees were blowing , the wind was blowing so hard my dress billowed around me a few times . So we ran inside the house an got washed up an just listened to the rain . The rain is very calming , just not when your in it .

Jeremiah Wheeler 1st per.

10/8/2015 11:56:05 pm

Rain falls in little drops making puddles and floods. From helping life to damaging. The wind carrying it in all different directions,making sure each strand of grass and flowers gets its share. To keep all life healthy and alive

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